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Dream Diary 8th Night by miimork Dream Diary 8th Night by miimork
I had a dream…
that I was a princess who heard some strange news from the next town.
It was to be told that a songwriter, who I was in loved with, was going to take a journey to find an inspiration for his new song.
My neighbors were gossiping that his song was lack of something, and he was searching for that missing part.
"What would it be?" I wondered; according to my theory, he himself was made only of an outline and there was no space for sure where a heart could exist inside his body. So would it be love? Emotion?

After considering for a minute, I made up my mind.
I would take a journey too.
My plan was to follow him secretly. I covered myself with transparent-colour paint, left space behind him for 3 steps (so that he wouldn't notice), and followed wherever he went (but sometimes I wanted him to notice my presence).

No, I was not going to help him find the unknown missing part or inspiration or something like that.

I was just trying to be an inspiration for his song.

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P.S. Please feel free to correct any of my English errors. Thank you!
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:iconyumikitsune:
YumiKitsune Jun 23, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Hm I found a few things to correct (Ahh I feel so bad ;_;)
In this line:
that I was a princess who heard a strange news from the next town.
I would just change it so it says "who heard some strange news"
In this line:
who the princess(or me) was in loved with
You could just say "Who I was in love with"
In this line:
After considering for a minute, I decided my mind.
I would say "I made up my mind"
In this line:
My plan A was to follow him secretly
I would just remove the A, not sure if it was a typo or if you were going for "Plan A" but you could just say "my plan was"
In this line:
but sometime I wanted him to notice my presence though
You would say "but sometimes I wanted him to notice my presence"
And I'm not sure about this line:
No, I was not going to help him find the unknown missing part or inspiration or something like that.
It seems like it isn't a necessary line because of the last line but that's just my opinion, there's actually nothing wrong with it

I hope I was helpful and not at all annoying >.<
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miimork Jun 25, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Awwww, you're so kind as always, thank you very much for both comments. All of your comments are always really helpful to me and not annoying at all! (in the opposite, I hope that my every time errors are not annying you T.T)

for the 10th night one , yes, I mean "That's all I want" but I wanted to make it rhyme with "instead" in the above line, so it turned out into an odd sentence TvT.
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shadow-fragments Jun 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
eyrgweyhwabfefuyhewjrjjj!!!~ *over load of words & feelings* Its beautiful!!!!!
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:iconharumilove4:
Ahhh I love love it the coloring is beautiful~
And I love all of these works on these "I had a dream..." series! Love it!

Love,
Harumi <3
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VictorHugo Jun 13, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Nice work on the Gentleman Ghost :) good job!
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Lenivaya Jun 13, 2013  Hobbyist
Mr. Songwriter really looks fancy ~_o

I also like the color theme, the blue and the brown go well together. The mixed shading with pencil gives this piece a nice contrast.

And you are having very interesting dreams, like fairytales :)
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miimork Jun 13, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Thank you very much for your comment!! <3<3<3

PS. This dream diary is fiction (;゚∀゚) Even myself can't have a fantasy dream like this too *lol*
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:icondetaclyver:
I agree with Luniki. (I didn't feel like repeating)
The story of this is really cute and have kind of warm feeling. :3
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Kitedge Jun 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
;^; I really love this serie of artwork!

And for the english part:

''he was made only of an outline and there was no space for sure where a heart could exist inside his body.''

I'm not english either, but hope it could help? *wait for more~*
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miimork Jun 13, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Thank you very much for your comment and correction!! <3<3 I got stuck on that sentence for a while, so your correction is very helpful!
Glad to hear that you like this series *blush*
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